"Writing comes from reading, and reading is the finest teacher of how to write." ~Annie Proulx
"The sharp odour of pine—wood, bark, cones, and needles—slivered through the air like blades, but beneath that, the fox recognized softer clover and wild garlic and ferns, and also a hundred things he had never encountered before that smelled green and urgent."
(Balzer and Bray, 2016 1-2)
You might have noticed the sophisticated punctuation (em dash —) which is used here to embed detail.
You might have noticed the repetition of 'and' (polysyndeton) used here to create rhythm.
You might have noticed the used of concrete nouns (clover, wild garlic, ferns) to add specificity and create a picture in the reader's mind.
Practice incorporating these craft moves in your own sentences:
Student Example: The sharp odour of rain—metallic, raw, and wet—filled the air like water, but under that, something else from the sky that was musty and dry.