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Unit 3: To Kill a Mockingbird
Unit 3: To Kill a Mockingbird
"What is Meaningful Education?" Researched Essay
"What is Meaningful Education?" Researched Essay
Changes I made to my rough draft:
Changes I made to my rough draft:
- The date was in the wrong format, displaying "March 7, 2019" instead of the MLA standard "7 March 2019".
- Some of the pronouns I used did not have a clear antecedent. I revised those sentences to provide a clear link between my ideas.
- I revised the transition between the introduction paragraph and paragraph 2. I emphasized the idea of benefits into the latter, creating a smoother movement of argument.
- In my original draft, I italicized all my quotation marks. I removed the formatting in the final draft.
- I did not provide the author when I first introduced To Kill a Mockingbird. I added a clarification in the final draft.
- I revised the transition between paragraph 2 and 3. I created a link using the idea of individualized pace of education to move between the two similar arguments.
- I added a stronger warrant at the end of paragraph 4 to link the statistic about homeschooling grades to my claim.
- I revised the transition between paragraph 4 and 5. I added the point about scholarly knowledge paired with life skills and values to the end of 4 to create stronger relevance to the introduction to paragraph 5.
- I removed a cliche from the beginning of paragraph 5 for a more formal tone.
- I removed the quotation marks around "stay at home all the time" in paragraph 6 due to the fact that I was not directly quoting anybody or anyone.
- I removed the underline from the header on my Works Cited page.
Education Reading Response
Education Reading Response
In this article, John Holt makes the claim that the public education system today fails to teach students in a meaningful, effective fashion. Rather, it is suppressing the natural desire in a human to make sense of the world, and, though that, learn. A child, who does not yet even understand what everybody around him or her is saying, learns language by his or herself. As Holt explains,
"He has solved the mystery of language. He has discovered it – babies don’t even know that language exists – and he has found out how it works and learned to use it. He has done it by exploring, by experimenting, by developing his own model of the grammar of language, by trying it out and seeing whether it works, by gradually changing it and refining it until it does work. And while he has been doing this, he has been learning other things as well, including many of the "concepts" that the schools think only they can teach him, and many that are more complicated than the ones they do try to teach him" (Holt 1)
But when a student is in school, they are told that this is the only place they learn. Now, the student begins to accept that this is the source for everything they need to know, and stop being curious about everything else. If they were allowed to explore on their own, they would learn everything they want to know, and often, that is exactly what they need to know.
In Wake STEM, students are encouraged to find what they want to know though systems like PBL. This is a step in the right direction, as they are free to explore more in areas that they are interested in. After all, the best motivator to learn is oneself.
I think this is my best response because it was the clearest, most structured analysis I made. I recognized the argument that would become one of my most important point in my Education essay. First, I made my objective summary, explaining clearly what the main point was (Say), then went more in depth in the next paragraph (Mean). Finally, I went beyond the text itself and pointed out applications that applied to me and my peers (Matter).
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