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Title
Title
A. The Old Man
A. The Old Man
B. You Only Live Once
B. You Only Live Once
C. Pumpkin Killer
C. Pumpkin Killer
D. The Thing
D. The Thing
Introduction:
Introduction:
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Have you ever heard the saying ‘Curiosity killed the cat’ since the day im about to tell you about,That's probably the most sensible thing I have ever heard.I was very tired and my dad just told me that we were going on a hike and today I was really not excited because he told me we were going to go up a really tall mountain.Eventually after a lot of moaning I made it to the top.Dad said he was going to use the bathroom and told me to wait up at the top.
Have you ever heard the saying ‘Curiosity killed the cat’ since the day im about to tell you about,That's probably the most sensible thing I have ever heard.I was very tired and my dad just told me that we were going on a hike and today I was really not excited because he told me we were going to go up a really tall mountain.Eventually after a lot of moaning I made it to the top.Dad said he was going to use the bathroom and told me to wait up at the top.
Dialogue
Dialogue
“Jake wake up”it was my brother Sam.”What I said,”How could you forget halloween Jake” sid his older brother Sam.It was the day of Jake’s first Halloween disco and him and Sam were going together.We got on our costumes and headed down to breakfast.”Are you looking forward to the disco Jake” said the boys mum Eileen.”I am thanks mum said Jake”.The disco was just past the old church in the school.The graveyard was supposedly haunted by a shadow man but Jake and Sam didn’t believe in that. It was just silly.
“Jake wake up”it was my brother Sam.”What I said,”How could you forget halloween Jake” sid his older brother Sam.It was the day of Jake’s first Halloween disco and him and Sam were going together.We got on our costumes and headed down to breakfast.”Are you looking forward to the disco Jake” said the boys mum Eileen.”I am thanks mum said Jake”.The disco was just past the old church in the school.The graveyard was supposedly haunted by a shadow man but Jake and Sam didn’t believe in that. It was just silly.
Sound Effects
Sound Effects
Buzz!!! My alarm clock went off and I was so annoyed because I was having such a good dream. When I got up my hair was all stuck up and I could get a horrible sewage smell so I decided to go down stairs hoping that the smell would go but it didn’t so I turned on the TV to see if my favourite show ‘how to train your dragon’ was on but straight away the news came up and it said that there was a lab explosion, nobody survived and that something escaped and that someone murdered a lot of people in Kildare village.
Buzz!!! My alarm clock went off and I was so annoyed because I was having such a good dream. When I got up my hair was all stuck up and I could get a horrible sewage smell so I decided to go down stairs hoping that the smell would go but it didn’t so I turned on the TV to see if my favourite show ‘how to train your dragon’ was on but straight away the news came up and it said that there was a lab explosion, nobody survived and that something escaped and that someone murdered a lot of people in Kildare village.
Plot
Plot
Having a good plot
Having a good plot
Setting
Setting
“Trick or Treat!” were the words that echoed around the whole town. The sun had set and the moon was glistening in amongst the stars. My fingers felt like ice blocks from the cool breeze that had swept in during the night. A very sugary taste lingered in my mouth from all of the sweets I had eaten. Fumes from a bonfire in the distance sent a tingling feeling up through my nose. Just the sight of all of the Halloween costumes was making me dizzy. Boom! went the sound of the fireworks which were quite close by. Full of excitement, my two friends and I dashed down the street, stopping at every house that we passed. Before we knew it we were out in the countryside. Suddenly my friend spotted a bright light in the distance. After that the light moved and was coming closer to us.
“Trick or Treat!” were the words that echoed around the whole town. The sun had set and the moon was glistening in amongst the stars. My fingers felt like ice blocks from the cool breeze that had swept in during the night. A very sugary taste lingered in my mouth from all of the sweets I had eaten. Fumes from a bonfire in the distance sent a tingling feeling up through my nose. Just the sight of all of the Halloween costumes was making me dizzy. Boom! went the sound of the fireworks which were quite close by. Full of excitement, my two friends and I dashed down the street, stopping at every house that we passed. Before we knew it we were out in the countryside. Suddenly my friend spotted a bright light in the distance. After that the light moved and was coming closer to us.
Suspense
Suspense
Scary
Scary
Conventions
Conventions
Sentence Openers
Sentence Openers
-Word-Cards.pdf“Trick or Treat!” were the words that echoed around the whole town. The sun had set and the moon was glistening in amongst the stars. My fingers felt like ice blocks from the cool breeze that had swept in during the night. A very sugary taste lingered in my mouth from all of the sweets I had eaten. Fumes from a bonfire in the distance sent a tingling feeling up through my nose. Just the sight of all of the Halloween costumes was making me dizzy. Boom! went the sound of the fireworks which were quite close by. Full of excitement, my two friends and I dashed down the street, stopping at every house that we passed. Before we knew it we were out in the countryside. Suddenly my friend spotted a bright light in the distance. After that the light moved and was coming closer to us.
“Trick or Treat!” were the words that echoed around the whole town. The sun had set and the moon was glistening in amongst the stars. My fingers felt like ice blocks from the cool breeze that had swept in during the night. A very sugary taste lingered in my mouth from all of the sweets I had eaten. Fumes from a bonfire in the distance sent a tingling feeling up through my nose. Just the sight of all of the Halloween costumes was making me dizzy. Boom! went the sound of the fireworks which were quite close by. Full of excitement, my two friends and I dashed down the street, stopping at every house that we passed. Before we knew it we were out in the countryside. Suddenly my friend spotted a bright light in the distance. After that the light moved and was coming closer to us.
Your Challenge
Your Challenge
Using the rubric that your teacher has given you, correct your piece of work and give yourself a score. Outline 5 ways in which you can improve this score.
Using the rubric that your teacher has given you, correct your piece of work and give yourself a score. Outline 5 ways in which you can improve this score.
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