Sentence Evolution

Sentence Evolution involves taking a sentence and evolving it to suit particular situations. Using evolution to improve, change, adapt or even destroy meaning helps to clarify intentions and refine purposes of words in sentences. See 'Opposites' examples below.

Evolution

Example

JMW Turner uses practical processes like brushing and blending to form an idea of a battle or an event.

JMW Turner uses practical processes that include brushstrokes and blending to depict the idea of a battle or an event. 

JMW Turner used brushstrokes and blending of paint to depict the energy and turmoil of a battle. 

JMW Turner used quick and energetic brushstrokes and blended them together to create the frenzied energy and turmoil of a battle at sea. 

JMW Turner’s energetic brushstrokes formed smoky clouds of chaotic, frenzied energy which suggest the turmoil of a sea battle. 

Example

Shakespeare’s portrayal of the complex nature of revenge contributes to Hamlet’s enduring value through creating engaging themes, such as the notion of harmatia, that provokes empathy within the audience.

Hamlet’s enduring value has in part been crafted by Shakespeare’s insightful commentary on the nature of revenge, as it highlights Hamlet’s hamartia, making Hamlet a modern and relatable character who resonates with a range of audiences.

The nature of revenge, as developed by Shakespeare, contributes to the enduring value of Hamlet by forming relatable characters with modern and lasting flaws and traits, such as Hamlet’s indecision at crucial moments in the play. 

Example

Omar Musa unravels the developing generation’s new perspectives of life through the materialistic obsessions; sex, money and drugs, with the vain hope of securing satisfaction through new experiences.

Omar Musa unravels his generation’s identity through his poem My Generation, challenging their pursuit of materialistic obsessions; sex, money and drugs, with the vain hope of securing satisfaction through these new experiences. 

In his poem My Generation, Omar Musa unravels the developing generation’s sense of purpose, which they gain through the materialistic obsessions; sex, money and drugs, with the vain hope of securing satisfaction through these new experiences.

In his poem My Generation, Omar Musa unravels his generation’s identity, which they gain through materialistic obsessions; sex, money and drugs, with the vain hope of securing satisfaction through these new experiences.

Experiment with opposites

Original

In Shakespeare’s Hamlet, the fascinating portrayal of Hamlet’s complex character, which is filled with deep implications for the audience over the course of history, contributes to the enduring values of the play. 

Opposite

In Shakespeare’s Hamlet, the boring portrayal of Hamlet’s simplistic character, which is loosely sketched with shallow implications to the audience over a brief period of history, contributes to the  irrelevance of the play in contemporary times.

Original

Julia Gillard was a passionate, fiery and determined politician who never allowed her femaleness be a reason for others to dismiss her ideas.

Opposite

Julia Gillard was a diminutive, shy, and lazy politician who always used her femaleness as an excuse for others to dismiss her ideas.