School Values: Critical Thinking - Identification of Changes

If you could redo this assignment, what would you change?

I think I will change the 1 paragraph. I am not talking about it. I think I can make it better and improve. In the essay I think I can change it smoother, not just repeating some words. Next spelling and grammar is also a thing that i need to improve for example, “Stanley learns a lot of thing” → “Stanley learns many things”(this is what teacher said )

Growth: Work/ Study Habits

What work/study habits can you work on to make sure you succeed?

I truly told that what happened in the story and challenged what Stanley did with Zero. Also I will tell you about what Stanley's experiment is. So i I think i do my best and also i talk about many stanley things that stanley met that is what i did very well

Growth: Collaboration/ Feedback

What did you learn from working with others?

In the class I listen to others' presentations. I think the most different part  is only how to show the character's feelings. Some of my classmates talk about a lot of things in the story like Mr. Sir and the warden, even Zero. They talk about a lot of details that I didn't talk about. These are the things that impress me a lot. So next time I'll read more and talk about deeper things .

Class-Specific

 What is one thing you particularly want people to notice when they look at your work?

I want them to know how Stanley felt in the camp and how his change of mindset before and after the camp. Stanley and Zero’s friendship is also a thing that I want to let people know. This story is a story that helped others and friendship. At the first stanley goes to the camp because the shoe but at last we know zero stole the shoe and stanley took it, After stanley knows the answer he didnt be angry to zero he still help Zero go up the god thumb mountain this is a very nice story. 

Growth: Collaboration/Feedback

How did you revise your essay after receiving feedback?

I change the commands that my classmate gives to me. The feedback that Owen gives to me tells me that I forgot to use past tense. And I want to change it ill try to do more grammar questions to improve my grammar

Conventions & Polish

What is one convention/area you still want to improve in your writing?

I want to improve my grammar because in the final essay I didn't do a great job with grammar. I have a lot of grammar mistakes so I want to improve them. Second, I think the story is not good enough. I'll try to make it more interactive, not just a strange and funny story. Next time ill try to do a better story that tells a story that will catch others' eyes. 

Class Specific

What theme or message did you want readers to understand?

In this story I want the readers to know about friendship and not rely on others too much. In the story i talk about that stanley is actually warden's kid but stanley hates warden and Zero so Stanley kills both of  them. Maybe the Warden really trusts Stanley, Stanley kills both of them when Warden tells Zero to go down to take the treasure. This tells that don't trust other