• "Sounds great, thanks so much. I think it is a very good introduction. I especially like her inner thoughts. The s*x scenes are not very detailed, which is fine due to the limited amout of words I commissioned (at the time). Also the introduction was much more important than the s*x scenes. Thanks for the update, a great read.  I like the last (character) a lot. It is absolutely no problem, if you take your time for this commission. Quality beats speed. All in all, I am very happy with the story so far. Thank you so much! The Bon Temps (chapters) read great. I once again read the whole commission thoroughly. All in all it is fantastic work. thanks you so much. I like the world building in Bon Temps very much. And the Mexican holiday is fun to read, too! Thanks, this is very generous. Wery good work so far." —@Sook, vampire enthusiast.

• "Thank you. I read over the story, and it looks great. 🙂 Thank you so much for all your hard work." —@manyhtt, manga reader.

• "I've read through to the end and the final part definitely cements this as my favourite of the large cast survival stories you've written for me. I think what really makes it work is that you took each element of the story - the heist, the jungle, the temple, the capture and the trial - and brought them to life, while having them all flow nicely one to the next.
  "The descriptions of the locations are so nicely vivid and full of personality that I really felt the shift as we go from the urban setting of the beginning, to the jungle terrain that's unfamiliar to the characters. I enjoyed the scenes of the group trekking through the jungle and the further shift as they enter the temple - it's a nicely chilly moment as they realise the jungle hasn't touched the inside of the temple. You go from one unfamiliar setting to another, and then again as we shift to the nightmarish community beneath the temple. It's all very effective and leaves the impression that a particularly epic - and terrifying - journey has been undertaken from beginning to end.
  "The heists at the beginning were a fun read and a fun change of pace/tone to the horror sections. At first I thought maybe the group was a little too efficient and successful, but it makes for some great scenes later, as the group end up out of their element and eventually totally in over their heads. Plus again in terms of linking everything together, it was a nice touch having the artifacts they stole be what led them to the lost temple, along with the heat on them making disappearing into the jungle for a while more appealing (worked a little too well in the end!)
  "Everything gets some great foreshadowing too, from the snake to the tribesmen who were living underground. In my outline there was kind of an awkward shift where we leave the temple for the last section of the story, so that change was a big improvement.
  "K accidentally shooting himself was hilarious. He was such a POS it was a lot of fun reading about his antics and the misfortunes that befall him, generally at his own behest.
  "The battle in the final chapter was a highlight. I wanted a particular focus in this story on the survival element: generally the survival stories are about the group having to work together, so I liked the idea of the group eventually turning against each other. Having them be criminals also allows for murkier elements regarding how far they'll go to survive. M using her wits as well as physical prowess made for an epic battle and I love how that whole scene played out.
  "An interesting what-if scenario that could have worked would have been to swap M’s role with C, with C being the one to betray the group, with her motive being needing to get back for her daughter's sake. As the sick daughter was only introduced later, after we’d went back and forth, I didn't think of it. But ultimately I'm very happy with how things played out anyway.
  "I also think you worked the daughter angle in well at the end anyway, to make the end more tragic. I was a little unsure at first if there was much purpose to A and Z surviving to the captivity part, since they didn't seem like they could serve much story purpose, but their fates helped make for a great dark ending. It really helps to convey the hopelessness of C's ending and what she went through in her final weeks. I enjoyed the dark elements of this story: after Ocean and Banshee have most of the characters survive, it allowed me to appreciate the return to gorier/darker elements." —@J. Knight, top reviewer & commissioner 2025.

• "You got through this quick! But the quality certainly wasn't compromised and I enjoyed reading this very much. Thanks for all your work on this. I'm glad we've managed to do a mixture of large and small cast stories. You did a great job taking the basic details given and using them to flesh out the characters and give them a detailed history.
  "I enjoyed reading D's backstory and seeing the workings of her mind and how she went about her work. It reminded me of one of the elements of the R commission that I really liked, where a lot of the real horror comes not from the creature this time but from the psychology of the protagonist's mind.
  "I could see where your original idea for an epilogue came from, where the horror was less about the terrifying situation she ultimately found herself in, but rather from the twisted way her mind would have adapted to the situation. I prefer the ending as written, but I could certainly see your ending being effective if the situation had been a touch less extreme.
  "The epilogue you went with instead, with V's diary, was effective in its place. It's good to see his perspective on things to clear up a few points, and helps to contrast him with D. Seeing what he wanted out of the relationship adds a good layer of pathos to the ending. I like that his last entry is so abrupt and on the nose.
  "There's a lot of elements to this story: strong characterizations and backstories, compelling action scenes, the twisted romantic elements, torture and gore, and you managed to pull them all off with excellent skill and believability. Everything blended together really nicely. The two fight sequences were thrilling to read. I loved how the first one ended, since I didn't see it coming. Great work on this as always." —@J. Knight, top reviewer & commissioner 2025.

• "Managed to catch up with everything and I'm very much enjoying the story so far. I'll save more detailed feedback for the end but I think your take on the characters and scenario are pretty spot on so far. One of my favourite scenes so far was the scene at the lighthouse. R explaining to the writers how to craft an effective horror scene, while the characters are in such a horror scene themselves, was a nice little meta moment. It's fitting for the scenario and you pulled it off in a way that doesn't feel too cute or break the reader's immersion.
  "R's nightmares are also effective scenes that also help with the pacing, since this is probably the most slow burn story we've done. I'm enjoying your take on her character.
  You'd mentioned in the doc notes that you'd done some reworking - I didn't highlight it because it didn't really matter that much, but I did notice that two different versions of the introduction to the characters and type of horror they write appear in the doc. Some of the characters' surnames even change across the two introductions. The first time, the narration introduces the characters and the type of horror they write, then there's a second reworked version a bit after where the characters introduce themselves and basically speak aloud the same information. Especially because they soon after that have another discussion as a group about the types of horror they write (which does have some new information). Then finally we have a very effective scene with R where she assesses the type of writer/person they are and the things they need to overcome, neatly foreshadowing some of the challenges they will face ahead and the personal obstacles they'll likely need to face.
  "It's a neat idea defining the characters in such a way though. The second day doesn't really have any such issues and was a smoother read. Things are picking up after the slow burn beginning and I'm looking forward to seeing what's next.
  "Thank you so much for the story. I was enthusiastic about the concept and characters and I'm very happy with the way you managed to weave everything together and make it work. The idea you had for R’s backstory and making her half-banshee was an excellent one. The nightmares really helped with the story pacing early on and the payoff, with the flashback scene towards the end, was an excellent one.
  "A conceit I liked throughout the story, that fit the folklore vibe, was that there was a lot of show don't tell, like with R and her parents' backstory being seen through flashback/dreams. Likewise with the other characters: we see multiple hints throughout the story that he has some kind of police background but it's never actually stated outright. You get a sense of who each character is, while leaving some mystery about them. Exposition is often kept to a minimum and it works well for this story.
  "Similarly, I appreciated getting to see a bit of an epilogue to the story and finding out something of what happened to the characters after the island. It was a neat touch to see some unused ideas for the characters appear here in some form. In the character outline for M, I'd originally had her as being fangirly towards R. Ultimately we went with there being more distance between R and the others, with there being personality clashes among the rest. I think that approach worked well, but I enjoyed getting to see some aspects like that worked in at the end, with M now famous in her own right and speaking highly of R.
  "The action scenes once the ogres attacked were tense and thrilling. I was definitely kept on my toes throughout. I knew the plan had been for G to survive but I really wasn't sure at one point that he was going to pull through. C and M stepping into leadership roles was nice to see, and all the characters got to step up at one point or another. I enjoyed seeing the group coming into their own given the rocky start for many of them. Also while they didn't get any kills (unless you count R), you built the ogres as a harrowing threat and it was clear without R's hidden power how horribly things would have ended up.
  "R's transformation and subsequent battle with the ogres was probably the part I was most looking forward to and you certainly delivered on it. Having her both possessing this ancient power while struggling with both an unfamiliar form and the mental strain of the situation was very well conveyed. The descriptions in this section were excellent.
  "The scene towards the end with the group trying to build the raft and R gradually being accepted by the group was one of my favourites. It's interesting to compare the early parts of the story where she's still human but generally standing apart from the group, whereas now when she's less human, the barrier between them finally starts to break.
  "I liked that the ending had some tragedy but was still hopeful, and the others still visit R on the island.
  "...Neat idea! Fine to leave things as is though. In a dramatic sense I think things work better with the leg injury, although definitely would have been a nice thematic touch. You worked some element in with this with R and her clawed hands, so we do get something from this idea.
  "G is the type who loves the sound of his own voice, so if his hand was injured I imagine he'd start using some kind of dictation software and realising he actually prefers writing that way. Then once he's made enough money, hiring an attractive assistant to do his typing while he dictates to them." —@J. Knight, top reviewer & commissioner 2025.

• "That last one you did wasn't half bad. I like it!" —@FlamesOfSorrow, SoFurry.

• "This was definitely the story I found most difficult to read with regards to the horror being inflicted on the characters - and since this is a horror story I mean that entirely as a positive."

"I liked the idea for this story of having there be shades of grey in the two main characters. I really liked the work you put in taking the basic ideas and fleshing them out to where the characters had fully realised back stories and a believably unhealthy relationship between two flawed people, but also being able to see good in them as well."

"This seems by far the most dialogue heavy story with lots of back and forth between the two main characters. I think you captured their 'voices' perfectly and I liked how their arguments could be at times comedic with them being snarky back and forth, but then turning ugly because they both knew exactly how to hit a sore spot on the other.

"For all their flaws, you still managed to find the humanity in these characters trapped in a horrific situation. When I was reading their more empathetic moments in part one that's where I knew the story was going to be tough to read because I knew they were going to lose some of that as the situation worsened later on. You did a great job making me invested in the characters and dreading what was to come - again, that's a positive for a horror story."

"For each story you've done I've talked about there being scenes with something that stands out to me as something particularly interesting visually. For this one I really loved the Found Footage style scene where Serenity gets swarmed by bugs and you're kind of in the moment with her as all these chaotic things are going on around her, with the camera swooping around and bugs everywhere, including crawling over the camera.

"Remaining mysteries: I knew when outlining this one I was much more intersted in the characters and scenario itself rather than having clear explanations for everything that was happening. For this one I was satisfied with a more nightmarish almost dream style plot where the logic isn't always clear. Which is fine on this occasion for a story commissioned by me for me, even though normally I would try to tie the logic together a bit more. Retail is actually a little similar, except once you have 'demons' as the explanation, that covers any logic gaps pretty well."

"You did in part one sort of allude to something bigger going on in the world at large (which was why none of their contacts were able to help them.) I think my own explanation for the infestation and quarantine would have come down to a larger world building thing as well. But since the story was always supposed to be from the perspective of just those two characters, I'm fine with the mysteries being left unsolved."

"Logistics of character positioning is probably one of the weaknesses back in Spiders. Not that I don't think Spiders is great, but with the main characters all moving in the same group as a group of mercenaries, there can easily be long stretches of action scenes where some of the main characters are just kind of lost in the group. Obviously we were still both finding our way a bit through that concept at that point. Golems tightened that up noticeably with the main protagonists all trying to help each other, while the human antagonist is still in the group but working to their own agenda, and you clearly understand what everyone's doing at most moments."

"Anyway, thanks very much for all your hard work and help over the past few months." —@J. Knight, Insect Horror Story.

• "I have just read it and i love it ,you have done a brilliant job." —@MchlRowles

• "I love it, thank you for the work you put into this." —@MchlRowles

• "Exceptional work so far! I appreciate how you've managed not only to streamline the complex outline given - your idea to move the action from ship to submarine was an excellent one - but also to embrace some of the more challenging layers of the story. The idea of Sophie hating the AI because to her mind her parents also saw it as their child - while the AI is subsequently focused on trying to get Sophie to relate to it as a sibling - is just so wonderfully layered and complex! The introduction of the mythical octopus - and the giant Kraken - was also really well handled. The horror and suspense are building nicely. And you've managed to introduce and develop all of the characters nicely so far. I look forward to seeing how you take things from here."

"Appreciate you not only taking on the challenge but managing to deliver a wonderful end result. Part of the complexity comes from simply trying to make the logistics of the sea voyage work and I think you showed great skill at being able to navigate the technical side of how everything works: you managed to convey how everything worked in a way that felt believable."

"Of course part of the complexity is definitely increased by my part where I've added in numerous elements that need to be juggled from the AI system, to the creatures, the layered human relationships and various plot elements. Your writing experience shows in how you managed to pull everything together and make everything blend together nicely."

"I especially enjoyed the payoff to something that came from a very brief discussion we had where you suggested giving the AI a machine like designation alongside the name Mandy. I loved the payoff to Sophie's character arc simply being that she calls her by the name Mandy for the first time. It's a nicely kind of understated moment all the better for just being allowed to sit there as it is." —@—@J. Knight, biggest commissioner of all time.

• "I think you've done enough. You wrote some very good dialogue!" —@Jotarion

• "I would have to say I'm in awe of the work you've done on this commission. I considered it a bit more of an esoteric idea than the previous commissions and I wasn't sure how well I'd be able to convey some of the ideas I had for it. You not only perfectly delivered on all of the ideas in my outline but added many interesting wrinkles of your own that really enhanced the story. I couldn't have hoped for a better end result.

"It was your own idea to make R a social media influencer and the story is all the better for it; it fits her character perfectly, giving her an outlet to show off her purchases and craft her illusionary fairy tale world.

"You had suggested taking time to flesh out R’s life and you did a fantastic job with this. Ultimately while the story later introduces monsters, some of the best horror stories are really about yourself and how you can't get away from yourself. You really nail that right from the beginning as you go through the loop and spiral of R’s scams and the increasing lengths she has to go through to maintain the same rush. Even when we did get to the introduction of the angel/demon hybrid creatures, you still do a great job keeping the focus on Rebecca and her guilt/the workings of her mind.

"Your introduction of the creatures does stand out as my favourite scene from the commissions you've written for me: full of fantastic nightmare imagery. I think you always manage to come up with strong, evocative descriptions and ideas that give a strong image to the reader visually. I think I forgot to mention in my feedback to the Golems story how much I loved the descriptions of the mud golem and the rock golem, where the mud golem is kind of melting and the rock golem is getting stuck in the mud golem.

"The creature scene here is also all the more effective because of the build up before it as we have the sharp contrast of the glamorous world that Rebecca has been trying to immerse herself in now running into the ugly reality of her actions. Your pacing was absolutely perfect and the different elements of the commission also afforded you the opportunity to show off some of the range of your writing. I think you managed to hit some of the more comedic points very well when we got to things like the absurd questions Rebecca had to answer on the return form, when she's trying to return her dress. Being able to manage the blend between all these different elements shows great skill.

"Another addition that was entirely yours that I really loved were all the scenes where Rebecca began to see the dress she had once loved as this cursed object that started to make her feel like a prisoner, with her inability to get rid of it. It was really neat to see her go through step by step each option she had to deal with the situation, from trying to pawn the dress to getting her followers to buy it, and seeing her psyche unravel as each attempt fails. It's a wonderfully absurd sounding horror concept that you make work brilliantly in execution. Likewise how when she was at her wits end, the way she turned to shopping for comfort made it clear that her habits would be hard to break. And also shows how isolated she is - shopping seems to the only thing she really has to turn to.

"And as for the final scenes… just wow. I was impressed with your suggestion, when I had given three different ideas for endings and you had an idea that made sense to use all of them. You executed everything perfectly. I was initially confused during the redemption parts by the crossed out words, thinking they were edits that had been left in. My eyes actually buldged when I realised they were supressed/repressed thoughts of R’s that cast doubt over whether she truly was embracing becoming a better person, or whether her efforts were based more off of fear from the terrifying things she'd seen.

"R’s final fate was absolutely brutal; you always do a great job with the death scenes and with just one in this story, you certainly gave her the most gruesome end we've seen in these stories (and just plain one of the most brutal deaths imaginable for that matter). Sometimes I just enjoy seeing a villain getting their comeuppance and sometimes from a horror perspective the horror is seeing someone suffer in a way they don't deserve. R’s ending is the best of both worlds: she was was afforded a chance at redemption and it's entirely her responsibility that she squandered it. At the same time, she certainly didn't deserve such an awful fate, and there's tragedy since we do see her at least trying to leave her old life behind and being able to recognise how empty it really was. She's more a weak willed, impulsive person than an evil one. In the end, it's fitting for her character to mentally seek refuge and find the happiest moments in her life were shopping and scams. And in the end that was just never going to be enough for her to escape her horrifying reality.
"Tying the reveal at the end to Halloween was a nice little timely touch! Thank you so much for all your work on this, the end result was wonderful." —@J. Knight, commissioner of a horror-survival story, best reviewer of all time, best customer to work with of all time, best timmer of all time & highest amount of one-time order 2024.

• "I've read through the first chapter and it's very impressive, high-quality work so far. At first from your early outline we politely disagreed on how the story should start; I knew from your more detailed outline you'd made the right call and from reading the first chapter I can no longer imagine it starting any other way.
  "You've done a great job taking the character details given and really getting into the mind and essence of the characters and fleshing out the details of the village/scenario. I also enjoyed how each character had their own unique reactions and perspectives to everything, along with the slow horror build.
  "The journalist club idea you had adds a nice element to the story and it's fun to see the characters engaging with the mystery of the village in different ways  that gives an element of uniqueness to each of them.
  "You've also done a great job capturing the force of personality of Susan. Looking forward to seeing where things go from here.
  "I've finished reading through chapters 2 and 3. Great job on the action scenes. It was thrilling to see the cast trying their best to all help each other, with everyone getting a moment to shine. Even though I know the rough events, you got me with the fake out when Trevor got caught in the mud the first time, only for Adam and Dennis to pull him out. It made Trevor's death that much more harrowing to read when it came, with the students helpless and you managed to make his death fantastically brutal. I really felt the impact it left on the rest of the cast. The deaths still to come are going to be difficult to read!
  "Likewise I enjoyed S's scheming and the set up of her as a danger to the others. Before I submitted the order I had gone back and forth on whether Susan was the villain or if she would be the leader/protector she first seems here (with the spirit of the witch likely being more of the direct villain in that scenario). So I enjoyed seeing the moment where she meets Trevor's eyes and has that moment when she makes her choice. The realisation that with other people arriving at the village, it's trying to continue and complete the curse was a nice reveal that helps the logic of the story.
  "Just finished the final chapters and am  delighted with the end result. I think you managed to take the various ingredients of the story and turn them into a tight, thrilling narrative that kept me engaged throughout. You really managed to bring the characters and scenario to life. You handled the romance/emotional elements of this one really well and kept everything well paced.
  "I think you nailed the characterisations and I appreciate that you managed to integrate all of them into the plot very well. Even in the chaotic action scenes you managed to keep them all active and acting believably in some very dynamic, harrowing scenes.
  "I really loved how you handled S as the main antagonist. I appreciate how you managed to integrate some shades of grey into her character; not enough to make you feel sympathy for her but enough to give her some layers and understanding of her motives. As we discussed I thought it important we understood her motivations throughout and I think you handled her character wonderfully.
  "One of the things I wasn't sure of in your outline was why once she had possession of the amulet she wouldn't just get everyone out of the village alive. The idea that in the heat of the moment her first instinct would be to order the golems to stay away from her, rather than to use the power to shield the group as a whole, was something I didn't expect and a clever idea that fit her character perfectly.
  "I was sad to see Q die as a result; I really loved how her initial abrasiveness towards the group transitioned towards using her skills (and abrasiveness) towards their enemies.
  "The final scenes with D and L felt very genuine and earned. And I loved the hypocrisy of Susan lecturing them about their 'weakness' all while her own weakness was getting the whole group killed. Oh, and the suggestion of a broken Lilith possibly still being alive and aware as her body was dragged into the mud was a particularly nasty one! You do a great job with the gore and demise scenes.
  "It seems somewhat left up to interpretation why S loses the amulet and control of the final golem, but my belief is that, as you established earlier, that as the golems grow more powerful with each kill, that Susan's sacrificing of the students inadvertently caused the last golem to grow stronger than the power of the amulet. That makes her death incredibly ironic and satisfying: with the exception of the bus driver and possibly Trevor, everyone including her would have survived if only she hadn't acted only towards her own self-interest.
  "The final scenes with A and Z were very sad. I did appreciate that the story ended on what works both as a joke but also as a genuine showing of resolve from Z in honour of what the group discussed. And I liked the contrast with S, with her being willing to fight for the survival of both her and Adam to the very end.
  "I think you've done a fantastic job with this. As previously discussed I've sent you a tip as thanks for this and the previous commission." —@J. Knight, commissioner of a horror-survival story, best reviewer of all time & highest amount of order placed under 1 month in 2024.

• "Just finished reading through... and I enjoyed them immensely. I think you really nailed all of the characters and found interesting ways to integrate all of them into the story.
  "I enjoyed the dynamic scenes with the characters battling for survival. J's death scene was fantastically gruesome and harrowing. I enjoyed B's final struggle - obviously I knew she wasn't going to make it out alive but you wrote it in a way that kept me on the edge of my seat regardless. Despite some selfishness I see her as more naive/emotional than all that bad a person so I did feel bad for her. The body horror stuff with H having spiders invading his body was awesome.
  "S's final fate was very satisfying. Since she's off-screen for a lot of the story I was concerned she might not be established enough by the end but you did a great job in a short amount of time establishing her character to make you root for her downfall.
  "You also did a great job of making R a quietly stated badass character. Making H the main POV character wasn't what I expected but you utilised it excellently and used his sympathy well. If possible would you be able to put the remaining word count towards Brooke's fate to make her end a bit more dynamic/gory? She gets the most abrupt end out of the main characters and her death is a bit more 'off-screen' than the others.
  "Thanks so much for all your efforts on this - I'm delighted with the final result and appreciate your hard work and very quick turnaround. Hope to work with you again in the future! I do have a similar style commission idea in mind that I just need to work out a few details on." —@J. Knight, commissioner of a horror-survival story, best reviewer of all time & highest amount of one-time order 2024.

• "Nice!!! Things are well written so far. I'm pleased :) I'm pretty impressed by how you handle things. I wish I had found you years ago! The way you described everything (...) was on point! It is truly a pleasure to talk to you. I'll be honest, it's a relief; I attempted to commission a big work before and it didn't turn out great; it was good, but they basically got really lazy and burnt out; the ending really suffered. It had a similar story to this; I'm glad I gave commissioning another chance... Just 1 person? Wow, you are super talented. Cool!" —@Jimbo, anime enthusiast & bulk commissioner of '悪魔の汚職' (book + character designs).

• “Not bad. You writing is very good.” —@Kayzokun & @WINDMILEYNO

• “This is really nice. I live for Tomoko/Komi shipping" —@georgeoswalddannyson

• "Having to think about 'street rats' when they kiss is simultaneously disgusting and so incredibly Watamote that I kinda loved this.” —@USSMurderHobo, reddit

• "I have checked and it's a wonderful story <3 Thank you. Can't wait for the next deposit!" —@yousachi, art commission artist & monthly subscriber (dark fairytale series).

• "F*ck, you're perfect..!" —@cosarcasmic, artist & instagrammer.

• "Thank you for the gift :) I very much like the story and I am excited to see what (will) happen in the second chapter--- Wow, the writing's just so hot! So good; you'd just be impatient to see more!" —@fhurai, ao3 & discordian (original character's stories).