Rhetorical Analysis

You made many changes to the draft from Foundational Analysis to Rhetorical Analysis Rough Draft. However, you removed the analysis you had in the foundational analysis in this draft. This draft shows elements of an introduction, a summary of the story, and the beginnings of a conclusion, but there is no evidence of the rhetorical elements we learned in class. Analysis from the evidence you provided is required to support your evaluation about the effectiveness of the rhetorical elements in the text. So you need to show me 1) a thesis, 2) three to five rhetorical elements, an evaluation/claim, and 4)analysis of evidence in support of main topics/ideas. You have not done this work in this draft.

In revising my essay on Hugh Howey's The Plagiarist, I focused on Adam Griffey's interaction with technology and its consequences. Reflecting on my initial draft, I recognized its lack of in-depth analysis and conclusive evaluation, especially regarding rhetorical elements. My draft incorporated many of Howey's thematic ideas but did not analyze the effectiveness of these elements or support them with evidence. To address this, I worked on expanding the introduction to provide a more comprehensive foundation and refined the conclusion to summarize key ideas while leaving the reader with a thought-provoking question.

One of my favorite aspects of the story was its use of haikus to divide the narrative into smaller, focused sections. Inspired by this, I structured my essay around haikus, integrating them as transitions between summary and analysis. This approach helped me to capture Howey's thematic intent but also showed me the lacuna in my analysis. While I used the haikus to reinforce the structure of the narrative, I found myself unable to incorporate an in-depth examination of rhetorical elements like thesis, claims, and evidence-based analysis, which ultimately weakened the argument.

Revision showed me the helpfulness of the feedback I was given regarding the thesis, elements of rhetoric, and analytical support. This really led me to think about how to approach the essay. If I would revise it, I would still do a more intentional thematic development and make sure every single rhetorical element is supported through detailed analysis. Although this was one of the most challenging drafts I have ever written, the process taught me the value of iterative improvement and how to approach problems without immediate solutions. The process has been a valuable step in my growth as a writer, highlighting both my progress and areas for further development.