Something Has to be done

One of our essays topics for my AP Language/American literature class was writing a common app essay. We were given a few different broad questions to choose from and write an essay about our answer. This essay mimics a college application essay. For my essay I chose to write about bullying being a problem and how there's a need for it to be terminated. In my essay, I think a strength I had was keeping the reader involved and interested in what I was saying. A weakness I had was not using enough information. I could have brought in some statistics about bullying to make my claim stronger.