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Task Description
In our classic Language Arts book, “The Lion, the Witch and the Wardrobe”, Tumnus is being turned to stone for helping the human girl, Lucy. This task is an extension of the lesson where we discussed, “Show not Tell” writing styles that are more descriptive, and put us more in touch with the character’s feelings.
Tumnus has chosen not to surrender the little girl, Lucy, to the evil White Witch –to his peril. Describing his expressions of pain and self-sacrifice are connected to our core value of Care for P5.
Student's work
5D (5) Tammy Chim
Mr. Tumnus stretched his hand and he wanted to free himself from the solid rock. He was going to be turned into a statue, so he tried his best to cry for help. Nobody was nearby though, and all he could do was open his mouth wide as no sound came out.
In his heart he felt really depressed. What had he done wrong? He just told the little boy to leave the White Witch. He wanted to cry but no tears would fall from his eyes. Mr. Tumnus knelt on the ground. Both his legs had turned into rocks and now only the upper part of his body was left. Could anyone help him? He shouted in his heart, but sadly, nobody could hear him.
Student's Reflection
In this lesson I have learned how to study a story from different angles and make it into creative writing. I am most proud of my own creativity involved in this task as I could write exactly what I thought. While working on this task, I researched information on the internet and asked opinions from my mother, who taught me how to write better sentences.
During this task, I learned perseverance and not to give up easily. If I had the chance to do this task again, I would add some dialogues to make the writing more descriptive.
Teacher's Comment
We studied writing sentences that had language with more description that could help the reader feel the writer’s thoughts and the character’s feelings better. Tammy did a great job of this. Her use of language was very descriptive, and captured the faun’s pain excellently. Tammy showed that she felt for the poor faun and in doing so showed the core value of Care.
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