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In this unit, Ashley learned how to describe pictures and connect ideas. During class, we discussed how we should treat the elderly and asked students to relate this to their own experience with grandparents. This task is about a boy named Derek, who didn’t seem to enjoy staying with his grandpa. Ashley was asked to describe what happened and gave an ending in her own words.
4E (15)Ashley Lam
An Unexpected Story
Derek is a boy, and his grandpa is living in elderly care. So, Derek and his parents go and visit grandpa every Sunday, which is what they are doing today.
Derek’s parents were happily feeding grandpa some congee, since grandpa couldn’t feed himself. Grandpa even had to sit in a wheelchair because he was too old and feeble to even walk properly. But, for some reason, Derek wasn’t happy at all. In fact, he was even annoyed!
Then one sunny Sunday, when they were about to head out to the elderly care home to visit grandpa, instead of putting on his shoes, Derek sat on the couch and gave his parents a piece of his mind. Derek told his parents how he was annoyed about going to the elderly care home every Sunday, and wanted to ride his bike instead.
His father was so shocked to hear what Derek had just said. He left the room to go to his bedroom for some peace and quiet. His mother was very stunned, and she grabbed a large photo album from the bookshelf. She showed Derek photos of his grandpa taking care of him. Things like his grandpa helping Derek wear his clothes and comb his hair when he was just a toddler. Derek felt bad after his mother showed him how he and his grandpa used to have the best bond ever.
After Derek apologized to his parents for his negative behaviour, they set out to the elderly care home. Derek now visits his grandpa very often, and they all live happily.
Student's Reflection
I personally think that I have gotten better at this kind of work by using some new words I’ve learnt over the past years. Although I met my standards, I think I need to improve by adding more details into it, since I reckon the description in the writing is a bit too basic. I hope I can get even better marks next time. I wish that others would look at the effort I put into this piece of work most.
Teacher's Comment
Ashley showed good observational skill while describing the pictures. She connected the story in a logical way and gave a lot of details. She described the characters’ feelings in detail. The story also demonstrated the importance of family and care. Great work, Ashley!
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