Exercise 10

Underline all the examples of poor academic writing from the following sentences. Number one is done as an example. 

Question 2 and 3 are performed at class.

4.  lf the present economic crisis goes on for a few more years, we'll all be in trouble. 

5. When you look into the causes of poverty in Africa, you have to consider that environmental factors are important. But these things are often ignored. 

6. ln my opinion, the biggest environmental problems in Bhutan are things like deforestation, pollution and the irresponsible dumping of waste. 

7. There are lots of things we need to consider when we try to figure out what's caused the current financial crisis. 

8. Populations of marine mammals are going down all around the world, because the condition of the oceans is getting worse and worse. Sadly, ocean pollution is a really big problem.

9. lt's madness to suggest that global warming is not caused by human activity, even though there are a few idiotic, so-called scientists who hold this view. 

10. I think there's plenty of evidence that television is good for children, though lots of educationalists disagree.

Exercise 11

Rewrite the above sentences in an academic style by retaining the original meaning. Number one and two are done as an example 

Q3. Answer

The problem of drug abuse in teenagers is complex with three main causes that must be addressed. 

Q4. Answer

Probably the ongoing economic crisis continues for several years, it will result in significant consequences.

Q5. Answer

Environmental factors must be taken into consideration while examining the causes of poverty in Africa. However, these things are frequently undermined.

Q6. Answer

The important environmental challenges in Bhutan include deforestation, pollution, and the irresponsible disposal of waste. 

Q7. Answer

When examining the causes of the current financial crisis many aspects need to be take into consideration.

Q8. Answer

Marine mammal populations are decreasing due to the worsening of the oceans owing to ocean pollution representing a major environmental concern. 

Q9. Answer

Even though some innocent, so-called scientists maintain that human activity is not the cause of global warming, this is illogical.

Q10. Answer

While many educationalists disagree, I believe there is sufficient proof that television is beneficial for children.