Progressfolio-Tri II

In this piece I have shared in depth things about characters and an important event, I also chose to explain how all chapters evolved and fit together. Bright Morning was the narrator and I believe I have described how I showed empathy and how I have told how she felt with the things that were happening, She made us feel empathy with her by talking in a certain way and how everything played out it caused us to feel everything that was happening. When I was working on my chapter pic collages I had to compare them a lot to get the best product like when I was making chapter four and then I moved on to five I had to really think how the transition between safe and not safe in her life. I believe that I am a very good reader and I can comprehend almost anything, I think its easier to study my work and redo because if I do that I already know whats wrong so I can make it better.

I wrote an argumentative essay and in it I kinda sided toward the Mountain side but I showed reasons and information on why we should stand strong on what we think. Just like I did clear your mind of other people trying to convince you and stand in what you believe in nothing is wrong when it comes to what you think. I did indeed though add in what I needed to, from clauses all the way to phrases like when I said "People on Hawaii fly the Hawaiian flag but how did it become that? Well Kamehameha-" and it goes on but I transitional and used phrases to help Readers understand. Its good to introduce your topic in the title and very clearly like how my title says "A Mountains Beauty"(I corrected it) and that tells how our mountain shines across Hawaii and its like an arrange of beautiful white snow and TElLEscOPeS?! Yes it does talk about how I very much dislike the telescopes that have homed themselves on Mauna A Wakea. I linked the Ideas of different categories by finding the ones that linked the most like What do you want to learn more and why? along with How do you feel about it and why do you feel this way? I combined them to make the paragraph stronger. Its kinda hard to leave something when you have so much in it to share.