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Enjoy viewing student writing from the Heartland Student Writing Journal.
Click on each visual to scroll through their writing for each day.
Aiden, a Heartland 7th grader, chose the Experienced level to complete week 9.
Day 2
Notice how he modified Day 2 to fit his values.
Day 3
He used a question to hook his reader. He also clearly stated his opinion and took a stance in the last sentence, his thesis.
Day 4
His Flee Map is full of information he will be using to write his essay.
Day 5
Aiden included a title for his essay and typed it out. I notice that he used a transition, "First off," in his second paragraph. This moves the reader along smoothly.
Way to go, Aiden! Thank you for sharing your writing with us.
Ben, a Heartland 4th grader, chose the Moving Forward level to complete week 1.
Day 2
Ben's learning coach helped him think of reasons why yoga is the best break activity. She was a super resource for him.
Day 3
I noticed that he used a simile ("peaceful like you are in the forest") to describe yoga. This makes his writing appealing.
Day 4
He succinctly summarized his information in the conclusion box.
Day 5
Ben calls the reader to action in his final sentence. Nice job!
Thank you for sharing your writing with us! I enjoyed learning about a super way to spend my break.
Lucia, a Heartland 5th grader, chose the Experienced level to complete week 9.
Day 2
She goes into greater detail about privacy under that branch.
Day 3
She noted that social media has pros and cons, which strengthens her argument.
Day 4
She uses the word "because" in the conclusion to show why she stands where she does.
Day 5
Notice the transitions she uses to move the reader along: first of all, second, lastly, and to conclude
Well done, Lucia! Thank you for sharing your writing with us.
William, a Heartland 6th grader, chose the Moving Forward level to complete week 5.
Day 2
His "Helps Mind" branch shows thought and detail.
Day 3
He uses "I think" to express his opinion.
Day 4
He is setting himself up for a coherent paragraph by placing transitions in each box above his reasons.
Day 5
We can see that William is addressing a real audience by his use of the phrase, "don't worry."
Thank you for sharing your writing with us, William! Lego is a super present.
Aubrey, a Heartland 3rd grader, chose the Moving Forward level to complete week 4.
Day 2
She categorized the different aspects of the jungle gym.
Day 3
She used accurate punctuation at the end of her first sentence.
Day 4
In her conclusion, she summed up all the things she wrote about.
Day 5
Notice that she indented her paragraph.
Aubrey, we appreciate you sharing your writing with us! The jungle gym is an exciting way to spend a break.
Clayton, a Heartland 4th grader, chose the Moving Forward level to complete week 4.
Day 2
He categorized a bit by time or sequence of events.
Day 3
Having the lines to write accentuates his nice penmanship.
Day 4
He restated his introductory sentence in a new way for his concluding sentence.
Day 5
Phrases that he used, like "there is nothing like being at the game" and "if you are lucky," show personality behind his writing. This is called voice.
Thank you, Clayton, for sharing your writing with us! Batter up!
Grace, a Heartland 3rd grader, chose the Moving Forward level to complete week 2.
Day 2
She numbered her categories. This will help when knowing when to write each topic.
Day 3
She used a dash when writing shape-shifting. Also, the star next to the Moving Forward category helps her know where to write. Good idea!
Day 4
She crossed out the transitions and wrote the ones she wanted. Great editing!
Day 5
She changed her opening sentence to a question for her reader. This grabs the attention of the audience. Smart move!
Grace, we appreciate you sharing your writing with us!
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