Candle's Corpse - Asad

I have lost myself in the deep trenches of the shadow,

divested of the cloak that binds me together,

I am nothing but flesh,

vulnerable to fear, to love

what remains of me 

is a candle’s corpse,

barely burning 

morphing into ashes of something 

long forgotten. 

somewhere,

perhaps in a tomb

tainted by blood,

embers collide together 

embers of longevity

blooming into orange vapors, 

traversing from one weathered rock

to the other 

a labyrinth of echoes.

a faceless silhouette spins under the ghastly light 

cast by eerie, coaxing claws

it’s the flame of the labyrinth 

faceless, devoid of a conscience

swaying to the eerie whispers 

that diverts its course. 

divested of my cloak, 

stumbling through the labyrinth 

a shard of immense light careens towards my 

nothingness

embers of longevity 

my blood blazes,

flesh undone

slumping toward 

shards of amber 

that seem shackled,

bound from leaping higher. 

embers of longevity 

vulnerable to fear, to love 

shadows melt away 

a haze reeking of 

the scent of

storm clouds, 

faceless whispers falling off

my charred skin

embers of longevity 

vulnerable to fear, to love  

Bio: Asad often hears his name being mispronounced as a-sad, which he thinks is understandable because his poetry pieces tend to be sentimental but he swears that isn't the case. when not researching about something niche, studying or contemplating the future, he can be found composing little poetry pieces in the safety of his notes app. he can be contacted on Instagram @festivefables

Commentary:

Reading a poem on anguish is like a heavy bollard to the heart. Asad's poem erupts like a long-subdued stream awaiting release. The breathless run of this poem adds to its intensity and so does the recurring phrase, 'embers of longevity'. The language is rich but the thing which appealed me the most is its effort of explaining 'pain' by a varied usage of references such as 'labyrinth', 'shadows', 'a divested cloak' etc. each amplifying the commotion in the poet's mind and heart.