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The text displays a writing one of our reporters from CSPNeagles.com, the blue is an additive to the story and/or a change that I chose to make to help the story flow better or clear up some confusion. The red shows what they had originally written and what I removed. Subtle changes were made throughout the piece to help make a clearer understanding of what the reporter was trying to state. Alongside that, taking into consideration that it was a sports story, the vocabulary and type of diction would be altered.
The blue demonstrates what I changed/added into the article. The red highlights what was originally there and what I chose to remove from the article. Small critiques were made to help the article have more clarity in its main argument. Switching from "or" to "and" in terms of describing how journalism can play a role in our lives made its idea seem more impactful.
The highlighted portion was used as a way for the writer to look back and work on it. Considering I myself am a writer, we have different writing styles which makes changing such a big portion of the article hard to not mess with the entirety of the text. This being said, when highlighted paragraphs are in my editting, the writers understand that together we can figure out another way to word the information.
Considering our proximity, the establishment of the new Trader Joes in Harbison was a brilliant idea for a article. It not only brought attention to the new building, but also gave some interesting facts about what the store. This story took a while to edit primarily because of the limited amount of information we had on the place. As an editor, I left recommendations for what could be added on and how to help make the story longer and more informative.
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