5. avoiding unclear comparisons

VI. Advanced Academic Writing: Research Paper, Thesis & Dissertation
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H. (relevant:) Oral Defense and Academic Presentation
(Notes by Huifang Peng)
# Common ways to avoid unclear comparisons
a. Add a verb or an auxiliary verb after the noun that is compared to the first one.
Example: 
(not clear) When we were in France, we didn't go as far as Nancy.
=> When we were in Italy, we didn't go as far as Mary went.
=> When we were in Italy, we didn't go as far as Mary did.     

b. Might have to add possessives to make sure that the two items you are comparing are truly comparable.
Example: 
(X) My bicycle isn't as expensive as Judy.
(O) My bicycle isn't as expensive as Judy's bicycle.
(O) My bicycle isn't as expensive as Judy's.

c. Add the one or those to make two comparisons clear.
Example: 
(X) The library in my university doesn't have as many books as Johnson.
(O) The library in my university doesn't have as many books as the one in Johnson's university.
(X) The libraries in my university don't have as many books as Johnson.
(O) The libraries in my university don't have as many books as those in Johnson's university. 

# relevant grammar:

Reference:
Boardman, Cynthia A. Writing to Communicate 3: Essays and the Short Research Paper. NY: Pearson Education, Inc., 2009. 155
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