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Exile (Fifth Draft On Hold)

Exile is a story that takes place is the same universe as Beyond the Lost Horizon, and might be considered a prequel to Spires of Infinity, however it is not very connected to either of them.  I wrote this story out of frustration at being turned down by agents because Beyond the Lost Horizon was too long.  I was annoyed and thought to myself, well, if they're not going to take a long story, fine, I'll write a short one.  The problem with this is that at half the length of the final draft of Beyond the Lost Horizon it has basically no character or plot developement at all, and rather than incorporating the writing skills that I'd learned by developing Beyond the Lost Horizon I just threw it together as quickly as possible.  Additionally I did not plan the story out very well before I started, and it does suffer considerably from it.  This story is not a bad story, but I did not give it the attention that it deserved. 
 
Through several more drafts I expanded the story to basically be what I envisioned it to be in the beginning.  Unfortunately I've basically abandoned this project for various reasons.  Namely that it has become ridiculously long for what actually happens in it.  I have realized that it is terribly generic, and does not bring anything new to a story that's been told a thousand times over already.  And it's frankly not very well written even after 3 complete revisions.  Now-a-days I basically use it as an example for myself as to what not to do while writing.  I learned a lot of very important lessons in this failure.  Most importantly is to plan things out better before starting.  But also a few things about padding out the plot with irrelevance, and a good lesson about the problems with being too generic.  Maybe someday, far, far in the future I will return to this project and put in the work to make a good story out of it, but it will not be anytime soon.  Despite the fact that I look on this book as a complete failure, the learning experience it gave was invaluable to me, and something I needed to discover on my own through failure.
 
The first draft of Exile clocks in at 117,352 words. 
The second draft ended at a whopping 247,112 words.
The third draft ended at an even larger 285,951 words.
The fourth draft ended at a huge 335,286 words.
 
And as always, with everything that I have posted here on this website, this story is protected under the same copyright laws that protect the books on your shelves, and the penalties for stealing them is the same.
 
Thank you for reading
Eric Allen
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