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Introduction
Introduction
The activities in this lesson are designed to help you revise your writing and engage in the process of editing.
You will be using a variety of editing tools to ensure your paragraph effectively, purposely and accurately reflects the persuasive idea you have explored.
During this lesson, you will:
Learn about the process of revising and editing drafts of writing
edit your writing using one checklist for ideas and purpose, and another for the mechanics of writing.
Student Booklet
Student Booklet
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Activity 1 – Revising the ideas in your paragraph
Activity 1 – Revising the ideas in your paragraph
Task
Task
Watch the resource 1 'The editing process' video and read the information below.
Resource 1 - The editing process
Duration: 2:10
Resource 1 - The editing process
The editing process is an important phase of composition.
During this stage you can refine your ideas and your writing (that is, the mechanics of writing such as grammar and spelling). This will ensure that what you publish is your best possible work.
Using a checklist can help to ensure that you are thorough during the editing and revising process. Other strategies for the editing phase include:
sending your work to your class teacher and asking for feedback – ask them to identify specific ways you can improve
swapping your work with a peer (either electronically or in person) and asking them to check your work focusing on a specific aspect of your writing
asking a peer or teachers to be a critical friend. You could ask them to focus on a specific feature of your response
read your work out aloud to hear if it flows and whether there are any structural errors (does one sentence lead clearly into the next?). Reading your work out loud may also help you identify where points need clarifying, improving or refining
read your work focusing specifically on identifying spelling or grammatical errors and structural errors.
During the revise and edit stage, use self-assessment tools to review your work. For this task:
review ideas – ensure the examples support the argument and check if you have used the rhetorical triangle to achieve your persuasive purpose
review your use of language devices – have you used features of persuasive writing to make your argument convincing?
review your use of the writing mechanics – check word choice, sentence types and other aspects of good writing such as spelling and punctuation
edit your draft, rewriting based on the issues you have identified.
Last lesson you wrote a persuasive paragraph. This lesson you are required to edit your work. Before you can edit your work, you must have a strong understanding of what you wrote about.
Reread your work and complete the following prompts to ensure you have included all the structural requirements for a persuasive paragraph.
What is my topic and the focalised issue?
What is my argument?
What do I want my responder to learn, consider, change their mind about?
What two bits of evidence did I use to support this argument?
What facts and statistics did I use to support my argument?
What expert opinions did I use to extend or support my argument?
Which language devices did I use to enhance the persuasive appeal of my argument?
How did I make the responder feel about the topic?
What have I asked my responder to do?
Review your answers to the above questions.
Are there any gaps?
Make note of these and when it is time, ensure you edit with this in mind.
Activity 1 – Revising the ideas in your paragraph
Duration: 1:13
Activity 2 – Editing your ideas – Using the rhetorical triangle
Activity 2 – Editing your ideas – Using the rhetorical triangle
You paragraph should include all aspects of the rhetorical triangle.
These should be balanced but blended throughout the paragraph. Because these are blended, it is not always immediately clear that you have balanced the three parts. For this reason, you should take your time and revise your writing with the rhetorical triangle as the focus.
Activity 2 – Editing your ideas – Using the rhetorical triangle
Duration: 1:14
Task
Task
Use the sample answer of the rhetorical triangle filled in to self-assess your work.
Revise your draft, using the table below to identify how much of the rhetorical triangle has been applied in your writing. You should have at least two pieces of evidence for each of the three elements of the rhetoric triangle.
Once you have finished coping down your examples. Assess how well the examples from your work meet the element of the rhetorical triangle.
If your work requires more of the elements of the rhetorical triangle, add them to your paragraph when rewriting and editing your draft.
Activity 3 – Rewrite the draft
Activity 3 – Rewrite the draft
Task 1
Task 1
Rewrite the paragraph you wrote in lesson seven. Address the issues you identified in activity 1 and 2 of this lesson.
Activity 3 – Rewrite the draft
Duration: 2:03
Task 2 - Self-assessment
Task 2 - Self-assessment
Now that you have rewritten your work, it is important to self-assess. This helps make sure you have achieved all your goals and corrected the things you wanted to fix.
To do this, you must be critical of your work.
You must also acknowledge when you have done something well too.
Use the checklist to assess your refined paragraph.
If a problem is identified, make notes in the final column to help you address this.
Did you tick ‘on my way’ or ‘no’ boxes? Spend some time rewriting sentences or phrases in your work that you identified need improving. The purpose of this is to compose a polished response, one that is ready for publishing!
Sample
Sample
One student needed to improve their topic sentence. They realised their topic sentence was ‘on its way’ to fulfilling the requirements. While it explains their argument and topic, it could be more powerful and express their stance more effectively.
Original sentence
I think that teenagers need to read more.
New sentence
Teenagers need to read more classic literature because these books will expand their thinking, exposure to language and broaden their general knowledge.
Reflection of the new sentences
Within the new sentence the student has focused on using high modality and demonstrating a clear justification. They provide a clear outline of cause and effect.
Next Lesson
Next Lesson
The last thing you need to do in the editing and revising phase of the writing process, is to check your writing for your writing mechanics. This will be completed in the final lesson. This will be the last step before you format your work for publishing!
Handing in your work
Handing in your work
Don't forget to hand in the work you completed today!
Your teacher will have told you to do one of the following:
Upload any digital documents you created and any photos you took of your written work to your Learning Management system (MS Teams, Google Classroom for example).
Email any digital documents you created and any photos you took of your written work to your teacher.
Make sure you keep any hand written work you did in your exercise book or folder as your teacher may need to see these when you are back in class.
Student reflection
Student reflection
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