Editor's Note: On her writing pages Ami has written reflections about her writing and embedded the presentation as well as writing from her Google Docs page.  Once the product has been uploaded to Docs, it's a very easy upload to the web page.

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I want to share:

My Adventure to the City

My reflection on how I write

    I am a good reader because I have good ideas to
write on. hat is good because you need a good idea to rite on or else your story will be boring. I won't want to read any boring story.

    My writing would improve if I write more description to it to make it interesting, but not boring description and also I should show not tell because it sounds weird and is also boring if I just tell the story, not show the story.

    My writing goal this year is to write with more descriptive words while telling more important facts. I want to show, not tell.

    I want to reflect on my adventure to the city. I worked with my partner, Teffanie. First, we made a writing piece and then turned that into a power point. We also showed that to our whole class.
    What I did well was that we made it into a power point with photo's on it so that people can understand more clearly. Also, we made it so that there wasn't much violence even though in the real world, people would use violence with a wild bear coming into the city.
   I can improve this by adding more details to the story and making it so that people can laugh. I can also put in more voice to it by adding more sentences witch the bear or people talks and use exciting vocabulary.