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Some new teaching about the use of English
 
I have an introduction that twice says: 'I live'.  The first time with parents and the second time with classmates.  Example:
 
I am from ____ and in which I live with my parents and brother.   [Later it says: Currently I live with my classmates]
 
You can't live in two places at once, So:
 
I grew up in _____ where I lived with my parents and brother.  [I come from____ - There are 4 people in my family - I have one brother]
 
Another student tried to write it a little differently. She wrote:
 
I was born and bred in Yancheng where I lived with my parents.  Now I live with my classmates......
 
I was born and bred in Yancheng where I lived with my parents but now stay with my classmates in the dormitory.....  - or -
 
I was born and bred in Yancheng where I lived with my parents until I came to this university where I now share a dormitory room with my classmates .....
 

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Nice Introduction:
 
My name is Guan Huaping and I'm a 22 year old girl from YanDu county, where my father, mother and brother still live.
 
After graduating from Shiyang high school, I chose to come to Yancheng Teacher's University and study Economic Business English, because I have a great interest in it.
 
As Suzhou is more developed than Yancheng, I hope to be a white collar worker in a foreign company there.
 
Curently I live happily in the dormitory with five other roomates.
 
[What year is she in?]
 
 

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Another Good Introduction
 
I am Wang Yingling, a 21 year old only child of a 3 person family.
 
After graduating from Xinfeng high school, I enterred Yancheng Teacher's University and am now a second year English Major.
 
I chose this university because I didn't get a high score in the entrance examination and I chose the English Major because I like it.
 
In the future, I want to work as a translator in a company, as I think it will be a good job for me.
 
Now I live on campus with my friend Li Meirong and I enjoy it.
 

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Good Introduction
 
 
My name is Gu Haoqing, I'm 21 years old and I currently study in the foreign language department at Yancheng Teacher's University as a second year business major.
 
I chose this university after spendiing three years at Baochang middle school, because I didn't do well in the entrance examination.
 
I want to be a white collar worker after graduating, and I think I am suited to that type of work.
 
Although I am from Nantong, from a family of four people which includes my father, mother, brother and I, I currently live with 5 other classmates on campus at YTU.
 
 
 
 
Order and Grammar
 
Additionally, in Beijing, the city I dreamt of in my childhood, I want to be a interpreter  and work for a trade company.
 
One day I want to be an interpreter in a trade company in Beijing, the city of which I dreamt in my childhood.
Having graduated from BinHai Senior High School, I entered Yancheng Teacher's University due to my not very high Collenge Entrance Examination score, and now I am a ....
 
Having graduated from Binhai Senior High School, I entered Yancheng Teacher's University because my College Entrance Examination score was not very high, and now I am a .....
 
Logic and coherence.
 
 
Words and sentences have meaning, and if you aren't careful, you end up saying something that was not what you meant.  Take this for example:
 
I wanted to be a interparator  in Nanjing when I was in Funing Middle School which I finished my middle school study, because I thought travel around might be wonderful.
 
When you were studying in Funing Middle school you wanted to be an interpreter in Nanjing - INSTEAD OF BEING A STUDENT?
 
You finished your middle school study because you thought travel might be wonderful?
 
While I was studying in Funing Middle School, I dreamt of becoming an interpreter in Nanjing, because I thought that that job would give me a chance to travel.
...and I am a graduate of Xiancheng Middle School.  Currently I was left with little choice but to attend Yancheng Teacher's university, where I am now a sophomore majoring business because of my poor University Entrance Examination.
 
... and I am a graduate of Xiancheng Middle school.  Because of my low University Entrance Examination score,  I was left with little choice but to attend YTU where I am now a sophomore majoring in Business English.
 

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Good Introduction
 
I'm Zhang Zhenni, I'm 20 years old, and come from Sheyang in Yancheng.
 
In 2007 after graduating from Sheyang High School, I entered YTU, because it is near my hometown, and I chose business English as my major, because I'm suited to this type of major.
 
I'm the only child in a three person family and I want to be an interpreter in Shenzhen; a beautiful city in the south of China.
 
Now I live with my roommates on campus and find it interesting to share one room with 5 other persons.