20th March Commencing Corrections in Class
Continued on April 20th
Taiwan is an island located to the South of Fujian Province, with a population of 23 million and an area of 120 square kilometres. It has a subtropical climate which is similar to that of China.
Does China have a subtropical climate or just parts of China?
Despite of Typhoons and earthquakes, Taiwan's tourism is flourishing.
Despite it's Typhoons
In spite of it's typhoons or in spite of typhoons...
yphoon not Typhone
As is known, (I didn't know!) there are many places of interest in Taiwan such as Sun Moon Lake, the Palace Museum and Yan Ming Shan Nature Park . These places grab tourist's interests and attract many people to spend their holidays there, thus fueling Taiwan's economic growth and adding diverse elements to it's culture.
These places attract tourists (which tourists?) who spend their holidays their holidays there, thus fueling Taiwan's economic growth, and in the process introduce new elements into Taiwan's Culture.
grab tourist's interests and attract many people to spend their holidays there,
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As the financial crisis broke out in 2008, almost all the countries in the world were influenced, with no exception of Taiwan.
When the financial crisis broke out in 2008, almost every country in the world was influenced, and Taiwan was no exception.
Obviously, Taiwan had an economic recession and a large number of people were laid off during the past year.
A large number of people were laid off during the past year, but now it is recovering.
However, the entertainment in Taiwan was still prosperous.
However, the entertainment industry in Taiwan remained prosperous.
Pop Stars such as Jay Chou, S.H.E. and Jolin are all from Taiwan.
In recent years, Taiwan has been interfered by the USA and Japan because these two countries want Taiwan to be independent from China.
In recent years, Taiwan has been interfered with by the USA and Japan
In recent years, The USA and Japan have interfered in Taiwan politics
because these two countries want Taiwan to be independent from China.
Last leader Chen Shuibian declared that Taiwan should have a formal independence while current leader Ma Yingjiu holds a different attitude.
The Last leader, Chen Shuibian, declared that Taiwan should have formal independence, while the current leader, Ma Yingjiu, holds a different attitude. has a different attitude - holds to a different opinion - works from a different position.
The education system in Taiwan is not as perfect as that in CHina.
The education system in Taiwan is not as perfect as China's.
Taiwan's education system is not as good as the Mainland System of Education.
Students in Taiwan usually have high scores in science while they often fail to pass English, geography and history examinations.
What's more, the teaching methods are not so practical that students are unable to understand
well. Double negative creates a positive
What's more, the teaching methods are not so practical that students are able to understand well.
The Teaching methods are not practical enough for students.
The average standard of living in Taiwan is high.
People are living a happy life and they often enjoy themselves by doing sports like basketball, volleyball and baseball.
People live a happy life and enjoy themselves by doing sports like basketball, volleyball and baseball.
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Iraq - Zhou Lu
Iraq, which is the derivative of the ancient Babylon Civilization, boasts it's multiculture and tremendous resources, is always a attraction to outside world.
Iraq, which is descended from the ancient Babylonian Civilization, and which boasts of it's multicultural society and it's tremendous resources, is a source of attraction to the outside world.
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Taiwan is an island with more than 23 million people which was settled 4000 years ago.
Taiwan is an island of more than 23 million people, and was first settled 4000 years ago.
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Taiwan is an island with a population of more than 23 million and a size of 120km2. Taiwanese settled in this island country 4000 years ago, and 98% of them are Han.
Taiwan is an island with a population of more than 23 million and has a land area of about 120km2. People first settled on this island 4000 years ago, and currently 98% of the population are Han.
Now the leader of Taiwan is Ma Yingjiu. There are 3 major parties in Taiwan. Now the Taiwan government is trying to make good policies to make people in Taiwan live better.
Currently the leader of Taiwan is Ma Yingjiu of the KMT. There are 3 major political parties in Taiwan. Today, the Taiwan government is trying to promote a better standard of living for the people of Taiwan.
Today, Taiwan's economy is developing rapidly. Go to THIS PAGE to see more corrections on class 07-5 page
April 20th 2009 Taiwan Corrections
There has been an overall improvement in writing, but there are some basic flaws in writing.
First and Most Important Point:
You want to promote the PRC and Defend it's honour, and stand against Taiwan independence - all of which is fine - BUT IF YOU ARE GOING TO DO IT IN ENGLISH - then you need to learn how to do it properly.
Example of statement about USA and Japan influence on Taiwan:
Taiwan has a close relationship with Japan and America, who always support it's independence.
This is not the best sentence but is much better than: Taiwan gets outside interference from USA and Japan.
In expressing the word - 'Interference' - you are expressing your personal (Mainland) political viewpoint but doing so as if your opinion was the personal Taiwan political viewpoint. When Taiwan is voluntarily dealing with the USA and Japan, what the USA and Japan do is NOT INTERFERENCE.
Taiwan suffers from outside interference from USA Japan, therefore, there is a long way to find a solution to the complicated situation in Taiwan.
Suffers from is a Mainland Political Concept that cannot be used in this essay, because in relating information about Taiwan's situation, you can't superimpose the 'mainland's' situation.
You could write something like: The PRC views American and Japanese support for Taiwan independence as 'interference' in China's domestic affairs. - or - The PRC must suffer (put up with) constant American and Japanese interference in Taiwan.
NOTE: THE WORD SUFFER ....
Don't mix objective reporting with subjective opinion.
REMEMBER WHAT I WROTE IN ANALYSING ESSAYS
When you write about the writer's perspective IT IS HIS PERSPECTIVE not your opinion - although you may speculate.
Some Grammar Issues:
Do not use the word There're
There’re: this is a contraction of “there are.” Quite frankly, you should probably avoid using it for formal or professional papers. Your readers will probably view it as an odd contraction and you may lose credibility as a result. It can be used in less formal assignments or artistic prose such as short stories, dialogue, or poetry. - http://www.uhv.edu/ac/student/writing/grammartip2005.03.23.htm
Buddhism and Christianity are RELIGIONS not REGIONS in Taiwan.
Tourism is flourishing in Taiwan - not flouring. (Flowering perhaps?)
Economy develops faster in Taiwan . but with the global crisis swiping off the whole world, Taiwan economy has to face recession, it also infludence the entertainment industry and tourism.
The Economy develops faster in Taiwan - faster than what - faster than where
. but with the global crisis swiping off the whole world, - what does SWIPING OFF mean??
Taiwan economy has to face recession, it also infludenceS the entertainment industry and tourism.
ECO-tourism and ECONOMY tourism......................
Some of you don't know what ECOtourism is and are writing ECONOMY TOURISM
EcoTourism ........tourism to exotic or threatened ecosystems to observe wildlife or to help preserve nature wordnet.princeton.edu/perl/webwn
Today, as we all know, education plays a vital role here and there including Taiwan.
What does this mean: 'here and there'?
The Climate there is Tender. Like a steak is tender? Or like Mother's tender care?
Pay attention to what YOU are writing
And the last leader, Chen Shui-bian, agreed to the independence from Taiwan.
Chen Shui-bian wanted independence from Taiwan?
However, during the process, some countries such as Japan and American interfere with the regression of Taiwan.
What does 'regression of Taiwan' mean? Check out this google page for suggestions.
My guess is that the writer understood regressing as:
An action of regressing, a return to a previous state; A psychotherapeutic method whereby healing is facilitated by inducing the patient to act ...en.wiktionary.org/wiki/regression But this meaning is quite different to what was intended.
Taiwan's return to China is not a regression to a former relationship with the motherland.
The Independence of Taiwan is always the political problem.
This sentence indicates that Taiwan is independent. It should read: The Question of Taiwan Independence has always been a political problem.
Wu Mengwen should join other students in being sent to the Political Teacher for re-education: Taiwan is not a country!
She also writes: The Education system in Taiwan is the responsibility of the Ministry of Education of the Republic of China. I WOULD LIKE TO KNOW WHAT THE PEOPLE OF TAIWAN THINK ABOUT THAT STATEMENT.
Gu Haiyan: Off to the Political Teacher for you too!
Ma Yingjiu declared his different attitude on May 20, 2008 that though Taiwan has its formal independence, it still needs to keep close contact with the mainland.....
Xu Jia li should be sent to the History Teacher not the Political teacher...
Taiwan is a beautiful island settled in north of China 4000 years ago with a population of 23 million.
So 4000 years ago Taiwan was located in the north of China - then moved south and east and finally into the ocean and whereas 4000 years ago it had a population of 23 million people it now has a population of ???????
Also: A warning from xu jiali about the dangers of having too many parties. They can lead to domestic violence.
Taiwan has different parties with different attitudes so that there are domestic violences in Taiwan! Say what girl?????????
Numerous students have throughout the various essays used the expression: 'will meet your taste'
Please do not use this expression. I can't even begin to explain it to you, but I have yet to see it used in a way that makes any sense.....
The culture tourism will meet your taste.....?????
Education: Taiwan students take drugs in Class?
Tang Danni wrote: There (Taiwan) students can get high in sceince but they fail to pass the examinations like English.
To 'get high' is an expression referring to people taking drugs. The Taiwan students get high in Science Class perhaps because they make drugs.
Luo Wan:
Using the word Aboriginal
indigenous: existing in a place from the earliest known times. original inhabitant: a member of a people who have lived in an area from the earliest known times
Music of the Aboriginal singers like Jay Chou, S.H.E., Jolin enjoys a high popularity.
Can't use Aboriginal to mean 'people born in Taiwan' or 'citizens of Taiwan'.
It refers to original inhabitants - Two Latin words make the word Aborigine. Ab meaning 'from' and origo meaning 'origin', the first existence, the beginning.
Most people RELAX - they don't RELAX THEMSELVES. You go to the beach to Relax - or play sport to relax - or watch movies to relax - but not RELAX YOURSELF.
It (Taiwan) has a subtropical climate which is similar to that of China.
2 Problems:
1. China is very large and has different climates in different places - so it is not true to say that China has a similar climate to Taiwan.
2. To say that China has a similar climate to Taiwan is to say that China and Taiwan are two different countries.
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