A. How will this Utopia come into being?
"In later news, a group of people from Encino, California are buying a yacht and traveling to somewhere in the Pacific. According to our reporters, they are attempting to create a utopia. Some people are calling them crazy", said a news anchor
This is the reason us 36 of us wanted to escape. Crazy, dumb, idiot are all examples of what we had to go through. We wanted to escape to the land of where crazy, dumb and idiot are non-existent. A land where you are able to speak your mind without being criticized for no reason. And also a land where rudeness is not acceptable. I, Nyc11, will create this land of perfection and those words will never pass through mine or anyone elses head. This will be a truly perfect life.
We started on December 26, 2007. The boat was already out in the water with all 36 of us in it. It was an expensive boat but it was it was going to be worth it and we all knew it. We didn't know where we were going but we had to go. We brought enough food for two weeks, but when we didn't find anything for a week, we weren't sure it would last us. Fortunately, a few days later, we bumped into an island. The island was about 5 square miles in area. On the island, we found a river, many trees bearing fruit, and many small animals that were edible. We all knew that we got lucky finding this island. It was exactly what we needed to run a smooth society.
What my Utopia is based on and why it will work...
My utopia is based on Kindness. It is based on kindness because everyday, millions of people are getting criticized for speaking their mind. In my utopia, no on can insult anyone. No one can be one bit mean to anyone. It's the law. It will work because when you are criticized, you don't really admit it but sometimes you are really hurt. We have tried to learn how to ignore this hurt but it is unavoidable... in our society. But in Nyc11's utopia, that hurt is diminished as soon as you step on the island. That hurt doesn't exist. Without that hurt, you might not realize it, you will feel your best and it will prevent you from insulting someone and continuing the chain. Once this chain is broken, many aspects of the society would run smoother than it would usually do in a regular society. Everybody in the society won't be worrying about what someone called them, they will be focused on what really matters, keeping the society alive. Although the only way you can find the society is by flying over it or finding it by boat, the population will not be in jeopardy. It won't be in jeopardy because in the society it isn't illegal to have kids or be in love, that would be rude. We will multiply. The utopia isn't just for escaping the mean words, it is also for learning how to never use them. The society is making better people... it will make me a better person.
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Wow, this is great so far. I like how you made it a story about yourself. It makes it seem like it is a true story. Also, I like the end when you said, "the society is making better people... it will make me a better person," because you are referring to other people, but also yourself. The Utopia is not just for them, but for you to. Kindness is also a good thing to base your Utopia on. I was just wondering what happens if somebody stops being kind, but other than that, I really like it.